Wednesday, April 29, 2009
Long time
Hey everyone, I havn't posted here in I don't know how long. I graduated from Ringling last year and am finding it harder to get feedback now. I'm doing a illo about the recent-ish hijacking by somalian pirates and am finding myself in need of some feedback. Here's the sketch (I've done a little more since the scan but not too much) Any feedback would help me a lot. Thanks
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This is a good sketch so far. Here's my take on what you could improve in this piece. For the composition, what bothers me is the perspective. Try using a perspective grid, make sure you know where the vanishing point is, even if it's located outside of the frame.
For the placement of the figure in the foreground, if you can, try to move him a bit to the left or the right. Just so his head isn't touching the border of the page, since that might catch unwanted attention to the viewer's eye.
Then, you can think about the anatomy of the figures. It saves a lot of trouble to have references in front of you while you're drawing. The foreground figure's arm doesn't seem to be bending like it should. I think it's mostly because of the way the hand was drawn. Is it holding the gun? If it is, then we should see only a little bit of the back of the hand.
Anyway, I hope this makes some sense...haha.
Yeah, I was using ref for the foreground figure and I think what isnt coming across is the fact that his elbow is really coming into him, like into his ribs (does that make sense?) I also put the head there on purpose, I had a reason but for some reason have now forgotten in (not good) thanks for the feedback I appreciate it and am trying to figure out the perspective, and how I want to skew it, right now.
Hey Josh.
I think this illustration could be a little bit more dramatic, as it stands right now, none of the figures feel really tense or as suspenseful as the hostage situations have been. Maybe redraw the main figure so that he's looking over his shoulder (back at the hostage maybe?) and has his shoulders hunched up more. Taking reference is good, but maybe your reference needs some action.
Also, I don't get a very good sense of the scene, are they inside or outside? Are they on a ship? If they were outside, it'd be cool to see the water and sky maybe, to help drive home the pirate thing.
Maybe consider adding some depth also. If you are efficient with silhouettes and body language, you could probably even get away with having the hostage and another pirate be very small, and have the figure in the foreground really communicate the story. Here's an example.
http://thanuka.com/work_images/C84E57_fullsize.JPG
The subject matter is really cool, so I'm excited to see what you do with it. If you're having trouble getting feedback, maybe join a forum like conceptart.org or one of the similar ones, they seem to be in full time crit mode over there. Hope you're well.
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